god'swife15 Apr 2003

Terrific structure, just needs fleshing out. Give me your personal story.

"The flower...to be."

What causes the flower to die? Exactly, tell me. Is the seed never planted? Does it die of thirst? Take me to your childhood, I want to see it, walk it's streets with you. I want to see what you saw as a child. Can you give me that?

I think your an interesting person. I bet you can tell an interesting story.

What crash?
What failure?
what suggestion?

Details, dress the story with the personality of the writer. The writer's personality, or sometimes the stories personality, is the only orginal thing a writer has to give. Details give excitement, interest.