Blue Magpie9 Oct 2003

Hi Suushin,
To take you comments as they come, I am sorry it didn't grab you, this is an experimental write for me, and I do have my audience of choice in mind. Funny you should suggest that the line "Jesus made Pilot feel uncomfortable" might be a forced rhyme, it was in the early drafts as an unrhymed, or unpaired line and I only added the trouble line much later.

Thanks for liking the last stanza. As for the IP, as I said to someone else, I deliberately stepped out of it in order to provide some relief. I fall into it so naturally it takes real effort to write anything of length and not use it, but it does get a bit soporific after a while. That is not to say my efforts worked, just to say what I thought I was trying to do.