Shuushin9 Oct 2003

It is neat how it reads louder and louder as one gets further down the poem.

I do think the knob could be turned a bit faster though.

You might accomplish this by either trimming the extra words, "to his anger" to "it", for example and restructuring the line breaks (okay, that might be deconstructive criticsm... maybe it's REconstructive...)

The ending has a nice snap to it.