poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on Let's Let the Flies In, Thomas by NanceXToo.

lastobelus5 Feb 2004

The last line appeals muchly to me as a good Canadian.

The one line I don't like -- and I dislike it quite strongly -- is "but I lost my voice when you lost yours" It's a cliche in an otherwise quite original depiction of remembering a lost mate. And your narrator just doesn't strike me at all as someone who's lost her voice. It jars.