SupremeDreamer16 Feb 2004

Editing suggestions? Cmon now, we are talking about a fucking massive amount of material here-- so to keep it simple perhaps you should break this up into several poems?

This piece as one entire poem is a short novella; then theres the linebreaks ofcourse... its seems a little random, and just about midway through the piece it seems like you suddenly abandoned putting form to your blank-verse all-together.

Other than the length, I enjoyed all of it (most of it anyway, there is ALOT of IT.. and my brain can only digest so much information at once.)

Blessed with ten.