Shuushin20 Mar 2004

Meaning aside - which is fine, the flow of this is a few extra words past something that I might like very much.

It has a musical flow to it that I often strive for.

But I'm not thrilled with some of the simple descriptors and imagery - while the cadence is melodic, the language is uncomfortable.

Does that make sense?

windy warm
formidable
long and tenderly - could do without those, in particular.