anonymous10 Apr 2002

you have a lot of superfluous articles that get in the way of your flow. We spent days/laughing in sunshine/running fields/dancing with dandelions/We were young/carefree/children in brightness/falling rain on our faces/ the breeze blew soft/stole our precious flower/the frightful storm/ripped our lives/oblivious/like dandelions/we too have gone to seed/blown away in the wind/we grow amongst the weed/I want to walk in the sun again/be a child of the sun/feel the rain on my face/dance with dandelions