babbit1117 Aug 2002

I'm not so sure this is brilliant and I hope this phase of your writing is passing. I realize reading the literary elite if Great Britain, especially in high school, can change our perspective greatly. Make us see the literary light, so to speak. In addition, it is important to try every convention that suits you, but maybe it is best left as practice. Besides being a very poor attempt at recreating style, the poem is filled with simple mistakes of language and numerous contradictions that when put together make the poem bounce off itself. It goes nowhere and sounds incredibly adolescent, even if it is wrapped in the antiquated language. See, they were using their own language. It was natural to them. Here it seems like you opened a Lit book, learned some new words and headed for the typewriter.