StuntHornist
on some deleted poem
21 Jul 2003, 8:35 PM
Pretty good, but spellcheck is your friend.
Dear Lord, please hear my prayer tonight,
For my husband has had a terrible fright.
His dear old mother has taken ill
And this is a void I cannot fill.
She's suffered now for years and years
And there have been so many tears,
But none of these were out of joy
And my husband's gone from a man to a boy.
If she should die this family would be halved
And it would be a long time before we laughed.
So please, dear Lord, take away her pain,
So we can see her smile again,
For her place can be filled by no other,
For this place in our hearts is for our dear mother.
Now, in you, I place my trust and love,
In you, dear Lord, in heaven above.
There? Are you happy? It's the same poem, only grammatically correct, and it STILL sucks.
Dark Angel, it's amazing. You commented everything I was thining when I read this, except for one thing: It's not only a "driveling song" in the book, it was a song composed by a MACHINE for the benefit of the unwashed masses. Isn't that so much worse?
I have some sympathy with Horus's point. It seems that the struggle in the Middle East at the moment is the result of the Jewish people having single-mindedly failed to learn from their own history of the last 50-60 years. Yes the Holocaust was an absolutely foul, vile, depraved event in history - and let's not imagine that the Germans were alone in their views, there were plenty of proto-Nazis in Britain, France, Italy, Spain (and the US - the KKK) who also had blood on their hands. However, I think the point of history is not to labour one event, one people's history, for the purpose of eliciting merely pity or horror (or, for that matter, Academy Awards). The point is to learn from it, to move on, to try to make the world progress in some way. Both Horus and Mr Pig have talked with some pride of their backgrounds, have distinguished different strains of identity, different ethnic groups. Everybody needs to know where they come from, but an obsessive attention to ethnic detail, to the rights and wrongs of past members of particular groups generations ago, is where all the trouble starts. What does it matter if your great-great-grandfather was a black Scotsman from Wales? It matters because it affects how you live now, how you understand the world; it should not be used as some kind of badge of honour. I think a person deserves special treatment not because of who their parents were, but because of what they do with their lives. Racial division is the biggest problem the human race faces, because it threatens to destroy us.
A small historical fact to add to the German/Jew argument - a lot of right-wing aggression towards the Jews was centred around a book called 'The Protocols of the Zionist Elders', which purported to have been produced by rabbis and leading Jews and which spoke of a conspiracy to take over the world. It was a forgery produced by European anti-Semites in the late 19th century. I don't think Hitler's rise to power is quite so easily explicable by the ambitions of the Jews. Anti-Semitism has a far longer and ignobler history than that, and you have to remember that Germany had been shafted in the Treay of Versailles by the very unJewish (and also fairly anti-Semitic in places) British, US and French governments.
Nice discussion, gentlemen. Wish I had time to read it all. when I get home. Amazing how much impact one day, minute , hour, moment, second, can have.
You would. Why not Mr Putz?
This is good. needs a tweak but I can't quite figure where yet.
Not very poetic and a bit list like.
Having said that this is not bad, afew surprises like 'cinnamon and lemons'
A better poem juxtaposed with mine there could not be.
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Your understanding of your own history as a Jew Mr. Pig is vague, tainted in fear and sensitivity and onesidedly weak and colorless. All people have a right to live, not just the jews. Your comment above makes you no better than hitler, just another uninformed fanatic and personally a waste of my knowledge and my time. Why don't you go read up on your history a little bit more then get back with me, because, it's worse than your haikus. Your jewish filter, is doing what most people hate jews for, it's taking 'them' (anyone who's not jewish) out of the equation and centering on you and your people. There were more than just jews in those camps. there were italians, greeks, poles, hungarians, russians, gypsys, anyone that didn't fit the nazi's bill... So tell me pig? What color were their stars? Check Mate, mate. Enjoy your trip, you deserve it, god knows your poor people have just gotten a bum deal, I'm sure everyone owes you and yours' a never ending appology. After wwII and every German boy between the ages of ten and twenty was dead, and the jews were dead and the japs were fucking NUKED! NUKED! god and they whine about that alot huh? do you think it was the German people's fault? What the fuck is wrong with you? Are you that fucking Jewish? You make me sick man, just disgusting, you didn't learn a fucking thing from either side.
This is like a creepy cross between a girl scout song and that kid's prayer, as in, "Love is something if you give it away," and "When I lay me down to sleep." In conclusion, you suck, you die, 1.
WEll you know what....you damn people that say others know nothing of what pain love can be...I say, SCREW YOU. I mean you don't have to be a certain age damn it. Certain things can happen. You can care for some one very deeply and then get hurt. So what you can love at any age. It is still love if a girl loves her daddy, so why is the affection between two individuals any different?
Kept my interest, and was well... cute, young and dramatically crushish, maybe if you could send me a shout of you in some cotton briefs back lit by purple candles with a short tight white tank top on nipples pushing through, black rose in your teeth, bach ringing through the air LEEEE DEE DA LA DEEE LEEEE DA LA DA LE DE WEWWWWWWWWWWEWWWWWWWEEEEEE <bow pull> <piano> <boink>
Ah, where was I again? cute, it was like hello kitty cute.
hehe nice poem. tsh
This poeme was the best.
poop.
poop.
A double scoop of poop with cocca sprinkles.
You get a 1 cuz you know who David Bowie is. <g> Man...