I really enjoy your writing darkhelmet10. This reminds me of 'Shall I compare thee to a summer's day' By William Shakespeare. -8-

This has got to be one of the worst poems I have ever read. While I agree, I still think you could have gotten your point across differently.

So many mixed messages. Think for yourselfs/done with military command. No good/no evil. Sin/Maybe no sin. loved it. -8-

My name is Settle. I live in Rhode Island. I draw pictures and write poems to make you all vomit with laughter. I am cool. Yea!

All things have a price and sometimes we just can't afford what we truely want. This gets the I BEEN THERE LIFE GET BETTER AWARD. -10-

You win a BEEN THERE BEFORE LIFE GETS BETTER AWARD. No really trust me. Compare this to a poem I wrote called Idiot Box. -10-

The way that your words talk about being pulled to different sides and then your eyes feel like they are being pulled to the other side of the page,*gasp for breathe* is absoluty genius. I'm creating a new award just for you. You get the BOORAH GRANDMA AWARD and the SWEET NEVER BEFORE AWARD. -10- and -10- But seeing as to how I only have one vote... You only get -10-

Sadly I must side with D.A., while I might not be the best speller or an excellent grammar student, I know how important grammar and spelling can be to just about everything you will try to accomplish in life. *If you can't spell people will never take you seriously, trust me it happens to me all the time. *Not understanding basic grammar will effect how you write and speak. *Do you ever finish reading a poem that has tons of grammatical errors? I don't, Because it shows that what they posted was something not very well thought out. They did not take the time to correct it, or improve on it, all they have is a foundation of an idea. I guarantee you that if they went over this poem a couple times it would be significantly better. While I do like this poem, like all I see room for improvement. 7

Well writer's block damn break. Your ending could be more poignant, but i won't sand bag you, and knit pick as you do about opinion. Enjoy your nine you mother fucking button up shirt. Our enmity is something that i don't have to allow getting in between good writing and my difficulties monitoring our self esteems dr. 'latina in a cantina' for a vacation from my life. i'm poud to say i sleep with mentally ill chicks that i can thumb steer. care for a cigar and a tv. guide?

Kinda reminds me of a song I know, One to another Do you remember me? I feel so small Well are you list'in to me So temporary The things that I have seen I ran so far Will you take me back again Entertaining angels By the light of my TV screen 24-7 you wait for me Entertaining angels By the time I fall to my knees Host of heaven, sing over me One to another The feelings in between I won't let go Of all you taught me - alright Close as a brother The way we used to be I'll hold my breath And I'll wait for you to breath Entertaining angels By the light of my TV screen 24-7 you wait for me Entertaining angels While the night becomes history Host of heaven, sing over me Entertaining angels By the light of my TV screen 24-7 you wait for me Entertaining angels By the time I fall to my knees Host of heaven, sing over me Entertaining angels By the light of my TV screen 24-7 you wait for me Entertaining angels While the night becomes history Host of heaven, sing over me

My name is Settle. I live in Rhode Island. I draw pictures and write poems to make you all vomit with laughter. I am cool. Yea!

You've obviously never fucked a hot young and clean transexual named and picked after your oedipus complex. They are better then most women because they appreciate you more since... Well their loneliness got thje best of them at birth. This poem though? Geez... I'm amazed at fhow you can go from solid shit to stinky inner leg paint in the blink of an I. here's a. 5. I'll laugh when you die from ebola instead. I'll mop up your melted mess out of love and my compulsive cleaning disorder, but mostly the latter

grr no one else has read this...

Nice flow, but I dont understand the "semen in my hands" are you implying that whoever this is talking about is lonely? 8

It was the special sound of his voice. Or the gleam in his eyes. Wait, what if it was the way he said You'r name that unmasked his disguise. I'm not certain, but whatever the cause, my mind still questions is this love? I heard my body scream as his hands touched my face I felt my knees weaken as he slowly kissed me But these moments do not campare to when we laid eye to eye in the bed we had shared and knowing his thoughts as he stared That was the look in his eyes I will never be the same With him by my side And in that one brief moment, In that space of time When all else stood still i met love... (Your poem was good but it had too many excess words that slowed the pace and flow. The fewer words in most cases will better support your meaning and will keep peoples attention.) 5

I like how you spaced the lines to make them seem opposite, what would have been cooler is if you had made this poem as an argument with yourself and had each line opposing the one before. I still like it though, 8

I'm guessing you're worth it. I'm REALLY guessing. But it's just a guess... I think...

Nice use of the heroic couplet.

Sweet, at least people have good things to say about your patriotic poem :).Good job kid.

Cool setup... Nice poem. Keep writing. Keep expressing yourself, you intelligent being you.