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on some deleted poem
18 Aug 2002, 6:04 AM
there' another optiion...
you tried harder with this one, but you're still not saying anything.
shouldn't 'sweet' be SWEET?
oh, i get it, it's just meant to waste our time. SAY SOMETHING, DAMMIT
Good morning Z..It's morning ..right? I am truly mother's beach towel..coming mother..she heard that.
morning B, B^Y, h, whoever you are today. i like B^Y's stuff. it meters bouncily.
I didn't know this was an arts and crafts site also. your rain drops? are incredibly droppish? and your writing is....easy to "get". I guess. But poignant none the less. I suppose?
Full of wit and slit. This poem is saucy to say the least. Beautiful style and story.T
liked this one. more crisp than the others' writings. but, i guess that's what you were going for with this mask, sybil my dahlingk
the 'he is swine' one doesn't do it for me like the others do. and, private lessons fromm willie will get you where yer going every damn time.
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
18 Aug 2002, 6:15 AM
Living with your negativity has to be hard for you. Always looking for someone to hurt so you feel less pain. The sad thing is, for some unknown reason, I instantly saw right through your words and knew you had a mother that abused you in one way or another. I also feel sorry for your child having to put up with a parent who wears their emotions on there sleeve. I bet the turmoil must be a fucken nightmare, always flashing back to your past. Probably why your partner left you and now you are a single parent. Hey, don't bother me a bit. We all create our onw hell and yours seems to be burning pretty hot. Oh yeah, after reading some of your crap, I can tell you are also very homophobic. Try to grow out of that. It will just hurt the kid in the long run.
7-7-7 for the others, and this one's called reno. coincidence? i think not. you give yourself away with the last, here. did you mean to? and the dangling letters, are you just flaunting it to get the bile a-flowing on the dark side? back to the poem--why not tie them all up at the end? i like neat packages, and you are using more structure with b^y, so why not take it the next step?
you do not want to heart me if i have to say something to you.
i will blow your tiny little adalecent mind and if this doesnt make any sense to you then it doesnt to me neither so there!!!!!!
what the fuck?
i swear man your poems are fucked up.
what sort of shit is goin on in that head of yours mann?
oh and what the hell happened to the first I? is it meant to be there or what?
your sayin that my poems are fucked up.
have you seen your own.
i mean what the hell is happening there?
Doug , mother and I are very proud! what a wonderful tone and mood you've instilled. I like beer. I hate work. I love love puddles. I hate messes. I don't hate you anymore. As an editor to mother I would recommend ending at "I love you" 1 pick, or "good night honey" 2 pick, or "sweet dreams" 3 pick 8/10 (just cuz I've been sinking your other shite)t
ah. unrequited love. the unattainable. the longing. the despair. the consequences. have you seen that online site with painitng by schizophenics? gud stuff there.
ta h. i'm off to paint the room red.
Sister! So mote it be..h
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
18 Aug 2002, 6:21 AM
Last comment was to be addressed to horus8. Also - your sad excuses attached to your apology was a bit pathetic. Bet you slap your kid and then try that shit with them.