| Re: Holocaust by Mr Pig |
Mr Pig 172.185.59.50 |
14-Sep-04/6:33 AM |
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This the original version to 'yellow star'
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| Re: Band Ten Hut by LintyWeenis |
LintyWeenis 152.163.101.10 |
13-Sep-04/7:33 PM |
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You probably won't get this unless you've been in a Marching Band before. And if you haven't, I hope that this poem helps paint a picture.
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| Re: Keep Your Mouth Shut and Your Gun Loaded by wilco |
LintyWeenis 152.163.101.10 |
13-Sep-04/7:34 PM |
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| Re: A Choice by Dovina |
wilco 4.227.32.129 |
13-Sep-04/7:41 PM |
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I rather like "They make me glad". Pure simplicity. Thats the way I like it.
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| Re: save by calliope |
LintyWeenis 152.163.101.10 |
13-Sep-04/7:41 PM |
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Eh, I'm a meat-eater, what can I say?
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
wilco 4.227.32.129 |
13-Sep-04/7:43 PM |
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The good thing about trees is that you can grow more. What'll they think of next?
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| Re: Run Material Girl by singinkygal |
LintyWeenis 152.163.101.10 |
13-Sep-04/7:44 PM |
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| Re: Solitude by Dovina |
Blue Magpie 212.205.251.5 |
13-Sep-04/10:02 PM |
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Dear Dovina,
While this is obviously a pretty picture the language usage does not appear to be very poetic to meeither in its use of metaphor etc, or in its imagery presentation, and there is not rhyme or rhythm. "A picture in Phi" what does this offer us phi "Φ" being the 21st letter of the Greek alphabet, the Greek equivalent of "F", a circle with a line through it, doesn't inspire me with images relevent to seashells or hermit crabs or solitude. So I am sorry but I just don't see the poetry here, just prose.
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| Re: Band Ten Hut by LintyWeenis |
Dan garcia-Black 66.159.217.143 |
13-Sep-04/11:53 PM |
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I can't blow horn worth a damn but I understand 'cause I play harp in a blues band.
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| Re: Keep Your Mouth Shut and Your Gun Loaded by wilco |
Dan garcia-Black 66.159.217.143 |
13-Sep-04/11:56 PM |
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Just knock up a neighbor's daughter. You'll be paying for that mistake the rest of your life.
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| Re: Solitude by Dovina |
Dan garcia-Black 66.159.217.143 |
14-Sep-04/12:00 AM |
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Why do we choke on "a spiral in Phi?" Pray tell, what does it mean Phi not Pi? -9- for being alone in your "phi-ness."
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| Re: Your Embrace by Brandy_n_Cali |
Dan garcia-Black 66.159.217.143 |
14-Sep-04/12:11 AM |
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Shouldn't "the clench of my hand" be " I clench his hard gland?"
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| Re: take it easy by skaskowski |
Dan garcia-Black 66.159.217.143 |
14-Sep-04/12:13 AM |
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| Re: Keep Your Mouth Shut and Your Gun Loaded by wilco |
Dovina 24.52.157.176 |
14-Sep-04/10:05 AM |
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Nothing left to do but blue collar bitching when all the debts are paid? I must be missing something.
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| Re: Redemption by leigh137 |
fevriere 62.254.128.6 |
14-Sep-04/10:53 AM |
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I think wrong/right should be right/wrong so that it doesn't rhyme. I like how chatty it is. :)
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| Re: ending by Eline |
fevriere 62.254.128.6 |
14-Sep-04/10:54 AM |
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Succinct. The kind of poem that sticks in heads. Yum.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
some deleted user 24.222.81.233 |
14-Sep-04/1:37 PM |
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| Re: Leaving and Coming by Spindle |
Prince of Void 83.170.55.136 |
14-Sep-04/8:27 PM |
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i think it's good i like it.... honstely speaking
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| Re: Leaving and Coming by Spindle |
Prince of Void 83.170.55.136 |
14-Sep-04/8:30 PM |
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i think it's good i like it.... honestly speaking
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Mystictwilight 205.188.116.68 |
14-Sep-04/9:03 PM |
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quite pointless if you ask me..this is not a poem.
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