poemranker ::20 most recent comments by Dovina (2021-2040)

Comments byDovina, 2021–2040 back. Include replies

on A Usual Days Perspective by TAMARAG67 31 Aug 2004, 8:19 PM
All poems are useless drivel. The human race is useless drivel. Hey, two peas in a pod. Neither on better than the other. I feel better already.
on the stone by BigB 31 Aug 2004, 12:42 PM
Why the little finger, and not the "ring" or "wedding" finger?
on ?{……..}? by Prince of Void 31 Aug 2004, 12:36 PM
I should rename myself Dawn - maybe after the election. "Returning as a star-born child" Hmmmm. Don't know what to make of it. Mysterious.
on some deleted poem 30 Aug 2004, 9:37 AM
"all things" seems like it should be "some things" or "impenetrable things." Otherwise great.
on along the alley by BigB 30 Aug 2004, 9:54 AM
The only thing I'd change is punctuation in the first verse to match the others.
on Out goes the baby with the garbage by INTRANSIT 30 Aug 2004, 9:52 AM
What a shock that must have been! No wonder I don't remember it. What an unruly eviction!
on He by BigB 30 Aug 2004, 9:47 AM
Too many possible interpretations for my taste. I'm sure you know what you mean, and if I did, I would probably like this poem better.
on The Room by darylchew 30 Aug 2004, 9:59 AM
Except for the line, "like my biography," this is much less subtle than "abortion." But I didn't get "abortion" at first. Maybe somewhere between is the balance.
on Mephistophelian Seductress by SupremeDreamer 29 Aug 2004, 9:39 AM
Ah, to seduce him as a female Mephistopheles devil, kind but candid, unlike the women who have nothing of value to say.
on Haunted by Bachus 29 Aug 2004, 9:45 AM
"Like a book read too much" That's the way these memories are. Why can't we just let them lie?
on some deleted poem 29 Aug 2004, 9:49 AM
Gosh I didn't know it heaved. Maybe I'll try a minimizing bra. Sorry.
on Love Letter by wilco 2 Sep 2004, 12:04 PM
She's young and don’t know nothing ‘bout life. A good He-done-her-wrong-song. But is crying bold? It seems more an escape from bold. The last verse - a nice switch.
on A Toast to Us! by singinkygal 3 Sep 2004, 11:15 AM
A perfect expression of passion.
on some deleted poem 4 Sep 2004, 11:17 AM
Out of your league is she? Keep trying will you? So nice of her to leave a small part. A sad comedy how we keep at these passions, not made for solitude. Good.
on some deleted poem 4 Sep 2004, 12:13 PM
A tombstone inscription you've prepared in advance? Like WB Yeats, “Cast a cold eye / On life / On death /
Horseman, pass by!” The “horseman” probably refers to the aristocracy of his time.
on Down Drown by LintyWeenis 4 Sep 2004, 12:17 PM
A good thought in need of control. Get a grip on that yarn, tighten it up.
on a night of solitude by Faulk 4 Sep 2004, 12:23 PM
Quite nice.
I'd leave out "heavenly" on line 3, and "lost" in line 5.
Line 6: "As the breeze stirs . . .
Omit "The totality of"
A beautiful scene.
on some deleted poem 4 Sep 2004, 12:26 PM
Calm down please. Let's pour some wine.
on Cast of Millions by MacFrantic 4 Sep 2004, 12:27 PM
Very amusing.
on A Soldier by dougsoderstrom 4 Sep 2004, 4:54 PM
And where would we be without them? A poignant reminder.