replying on A Walk in the Park by Dovina
3 Feb 2006, 7:14 AM
Asways happy when a man relates to this sort of thing. thanks.
replying on A Walk in the Park by Dovina
3 Feb 2006, 7:13 AM
It's a girl thing, yes, but I was hoping the ending would give broader meaning. Thanks.
replying on A Walk in the Park by Dovina
3 Feb 2006, 7:11 AM
It does take a strange turn in mid-poem. I almost left it at two verses, but thought it too girly cute.
on Time by sk8rs_rule_all
3 Feb 2006, 7:09 AM
misspellings, cliche in the last line. Do yoy mean "if only I" in the redundent first line?
replying on inadequate by skaskowski
2 Feb 2006, 5:20 PM
That would be using a poetic-sounding slogan for rhetorical purposes, which is unethical. It would be like saying “Racist, sexist, anti-gay, George Bush go away” because the sound of it lends a perception of truth. Or marching in Washington, chanting “This is what democracy looks like,” then pointing to the Supreme Count while shouting, “That is what hypocrisy looks like.” I’m above that.
replying on Nomads by amanda_dcosta
2 Feb 2006, 5:07 PM
Learing to cook means using what's in the fridge.
on Nomads by amanda_dcosta
2 Feb 2006, 2:05 PM
You will always get quibbles about 5-7-5 in a haiku here on poemranker unless you toe the line. Other are not so picky.
I see the birds as not really wandering, as you understand them, giving more than average credit to birds. Thats good.
I see the birds as not really wandering, as you understand them, giving more than average credit to birds. Thats good.
on inadequate by skaskowski
2 Feb 2006, 2:00 PM
Good up to the last line, which kills it.
on Unhappy Marriages by Caducus
2 Feb 2006, 1:57 PM
"Free spirits caged on a pedestal" - great line.
"masques" I think you mean
"with twice sung hymns" grammar
Married to God implies a num, but the preceeding seem like a human marriage.
the title seem too descriptive, too blunt.
"masques" I think you mean
"with twice sung hymns" grammar
Married to God implies a num, but the preceeding seem like a human marriage.
the title seem too descriptive, too blunt.
replying on The Book of Images by Dovina
2 Feb 2006, 1:44 PM
Nothing on poemranker is too cheeky. Ask away, but personal experience always leads to the best poems, and I have never swung nor been swung.
replying on The Book of Images by Dovina
2 Feb 2006, 1:36 PM
lol on the swinging hips.
If a comment is deleted, it still counts in the number of comments, so the counter is not a reliable guide. Also, if a poem has received comments, but no votes, the comments do not always enter the comment counter.
No, what happened to
Alchemy's comments needs a better explanation.
If a comment is deleted, it still counts in the number of comments, so the counter is not a reliable guide. Also, if a poem has received comments, but no votes, the comments do not always enter the comment counter.
No, what happened to
Alchemy's comments needs a better explanation.
replying on The Book of Images by Dovina
2 Feb 2006, 1:15 PM
Thanks for the ten, but it is really a very simplistic poem, designed only to show that much of the Bible is composed of images. When they say I am merely copying and saying the obvious, they are correct.
replying on The Book of Images by Dovina
2 Feb 2006, 1:14 PM
Yes, but some cannibals are cute, intriguing, interesting, insightful, or swing their hips in alluring manners.
replying on The Book of Images by Dovina
2 Feb 2006, 1:06 PM
Hey, Alchemy, what's going on? I know you made comments that preceeded my comments above, but where are they? Mine look kinda silly without them. I think you said it's ironic that my poem is about about imagery, but does not use imagery, to which I gave you a poem using imagry. You also said something about what it takes to get a 10, to which I spoke of Jesus' beard. Did you delete these comments?
on Les Imagistes by Nicholas Jones
1 Feb 2006, 11:15 AM
I like CS Lewis on the use of imagination. His image of the lion in Narnia, for example, came as a dream, but he developed the image, the character, beyond the initial vision using logic and allusion. Your duck walking on ice, and confused by the image of walking on water, is ready, as think you might be implying, to make something poetic and meaningful from that experience.
replying on The Book of Images by Dovina
1 Feb 2006, 10:59 AM
Nothing much at all. That's right. Thank you for commenting.
replying on The Book of Images by Dovina
1 Feb 2006, 5:37 AM
All it takes to get tens is to enumerate most of the conceivable ways to fit Jesus with a beard. And to delete comments would not be practicing what I preach. Methinks the Tempter knocketh at my door.
replying on The Book of Images by Dovina
1 Feb 2006, 5:13 AM
The Bible, mostly. A bunch of Bible quotes, twisted and stuck randomly together.
replying on The Book of Images by Dovina
31 Jan 2006, 8:26 PM
Yes, and let me correct that.
He rode into town to collect his wages,
on a wild donkey, Ishmael’s seed,
wool on the beast and he alike,
and while in Rome, he did as the Romans,
Thus washing his hands of any sin.
He rode by the trees on the water’s bank
and the chaff the reapers let fly.
The trees bore fruit, but the chaff blew away,
and our concealed man’s sin
crouched at his door.
Though he was sweating, he tasted no salt.
Covered in wool, he felt no shield.
He saw a sparrow fall,
and felt he was watched,
found a treasure in a field,
and stopped to dig it up.
He felt a seed fall upon him
and smartly brushed it away.
He collected his wages alright
when his white mount fell in the mud.
He rode into town to collect his wages,
on a wild donkey, Ishmael’s seed,
wool on the beast and he alike,
and while in Rome, he did as the Romans,
Thus washing his hands of any sin.
He rode by the trees on the water’s bank
and the chaff the reapers let fly.
The trees bore fruit, but the chaff blew away,
and our concealed man’s sin
crouched at his door.
Though he was sweating, he tasted no salt.
Covered in wool, he felt no shield.
He saw a sparrow fall,
and felt he was watched,
found a treasure in a field,
and stopped to dig it up.
He felt a seed fall upon him
and smartly brushed it away.
He collected his wages alright
when his white mount fell in the mud.
replying on The Book of Images by Dovina
31 Jan 2006, 5:10 PM
Yes, ironically.