on deep by bxjay170
25 Jun 2004, 4:25 PM
spelling and grammar aren't what poetry is about, but the lack of them distracts from the message. All that aside, I could see the feeling behind this. Avoid cliche - deeper _than_ the sea, is not a fresh image.
on Love poem (on sense and experience) by thavimatola
25 Jun 2004, 4:23 PM
Lots of good things here - just needs a touch more to hold it together for me.