God's Wife - I'd like to say I appreciated your criticism, however, I felt that there was little constructive criticism within what you said. Poetry does not have a "formula", it is a way to express yourself however you choose to do so--whether it's long and wordy or concise. You'd do better to forget judging others' work using rules that dictate length as well as style.

On another note, I've had about 200-300 people read this work, and those who chose to comment enjoyed it.