on Tainted by necroscope7
3 Apr 2005, 10:56 AM
your overwrought rhymes destroys what you might have had hear
on Note before work by poetandknowit
3 Apr 2005, 10:57 AM
this is very beautiful
on Let Go by PunkyPanda
14 Apr 2005, 2:34 PM
i understand the emotion and have felt it before, but you need to lighten up on the language, and edit it some before it is really good
on Letter to the Horsehead Nebula by Tangerines
14 Apr 2005, 2:39 PM
nice poem, but you are wrong, this is what it is to be alive and happy
one could also say, that "i woke and could not believe i was still alive / i wished so much that i could die/ im stunned at the pain that the world is filled with / what kind of meaning can one find in this life......and afterward, when is tep out to get the paper/ i am overcome by the futility of it all/ gowing through the motions/ i feel the sharp air stabbing my lungs, look somebody just died/ this is what it is to be alive / everything is a mistake the stars / are mocking me with their happiness/ how can they enjoy being lonely/ at night i stand outside staring/ at the sky, distant planets and suns/stunned by the vast expanse of the universe/ in which i am the source of nothing/ nothing good, nothing evil/ i am nothing and am of no importance/ not even my name will be remembered
just throwing that out there
-megan
one could also say, that "i woke and could not believe i was still alive / i wished so much that i could die/ im stunned at the pain that the world is filled with / what kind of meaning can one find in this life......and afterward, when is tep out to get the paper/ i am overcome by the futility of it all/ gowing through the motions/ i feel the sharp air stabbing my lungs, look somebody just died/ this is what it is to be alive / everything is a mistake the stars / are mocking me with their happiness/ how can they enjoy being lonely/ at night i stand outside staring/ at the sky, distant planets and suns/stunned by the vast expanse of the universe/ in which i am the source of nothing/ nothing good, nothing evil/ i am nothing and am of no importance/ not even my name will be remembered
just throwing that out there
-megan