replying on Sunlighting by ALChemy
5 Jan 2006, 10:24 AM
OK done deal. Dawn stays.
replying on Romans 8:28 by amanda_dcosta
5 Jan 2006, 10:08 AM
Most people go to these far off places in search of adventure. You just seem to get Forest Gumped into them. Lucky for you, you're a writer.
replying on The Forgetting by Dovina
5 Jan 2006, 9:53 AM
Sometimes man, you just plain old scare me.
replying on Romans 8:28 by amanda_dcosta
5 Jan 2006, 9:48 AM
I don't think it really matters that much as long as their not bothering me. Whatever floats their boat.
Maybe we should just start typing "The last word" back and forth until one of us gives up. This brain-fencing can be exhausting.
Maybe we should just start typing "The last word" back and forth until one of us gives up. This brain-fencing can be exhausting.
replying on Sunlighting by ALChemy
5 Jan 2006, 9:36 AM
Thank you too.
I think my favorite type of response is one filled with adjectives. I'll try to take a look at more of your poems but I work nights so I've got to get some shut-eye right now.
I think my favorite type of response is one filled with adjectives. I'll try to take a look at more of your poems but I work nights so I've got to get some shut-eye right now.
replying on Sunlighting by ALChemy
5 Jan 2006, 8:18 AM
Yep, you got it.
I was inspired by my niece. I work the nightshift and I miss alot of chances to spend time with her.
Thanks Joe.
I was inspired by my niece. I work the nightshift and I miss alot of chances to spend time with her.
Thanks Joe.
replying on Sunlighting by ALChemy
5 Jan 2006, 8:09 AM
No I meant "don" as a verb. As in "I donned a fancy suit for my date." Although Marlin Brando lived on an island so he might have donned a sarong.
replying on Sunlighting by ALChemy
5 Jan 2006, 5:30 AM
Thanks. It's rare for most people to say things that sound original and yet you seem to have a knack for it. That's where I think I envy you most. I actually misspelled "Don" as "Dawn" but I'm not quite sure which one works better now. What do you think?
replying on The Forgetting by Dovina
4 Jan 2006, 6:17 PM
Personally I embrace contradictions. It's helps you get along with people better.
replying on The Forgetting by Dovina
4 Jan 2006, 6:11 PM
But when your imagination exceeds your ability it can be a depressing. Rodin's sculpture "The Thinker" is about that.
on We'll be right back after these messages by INTRANSIT
4 Jan 2006, 6:04 PM
Hah! Once again it seems we posted poems on simular subjects. See, God does speak to us. And by God I mean TV.
Witty stuff.
Witty stuff.
on Goodbye Sad Door by woodstock20000
4 Jan 2006, 5:58 PM
Could have many different meanings. I kind of wish it was a little bit more specific as it sounds pretty personal. End it sad or happy or hopeful. Which ever way you like. It still sounds good.
on Claim to Call by MacFrantic
4 Jan 2006, 5:51 PM
The fragmented sentences don't seem to work for this.
The last half of the poem is great.
The last half of the poem is great.
on Half Hearted by elderking
4 Jan 2006, 5:41 PM
The flow is too marching band-like for a love poem.
Don't be afraid to bleed one line into the other by continuing the sentence or changing the meter slightly to slow or quicken the pace for added effect.
Maybe something like this:
Those half hearted chances
at loving once more
in half tried romances
leave me wanting for
impassioned embraces.
But allowed just so close.
My loving heart races,
while ours reach "almost".
These pleasures, half tasted,
amount to as much
as kisses wasted,
and hearts untouched.
Don't be afraid to bleed one line into the other by continuing the sentence or changing the meter slightly to slow or quicken the pace for added effect.
Maybe something like this:
Those half hearted chances
at loving once more
in half tried romances
leave me wanting for
impassioned embraces.
But allowed just so close.
My loving heart races,
while ours reach "almost".
These pleasures, half tasted,
amount to as much
as kisses wasted,
and hearts untouched.
on This Is Me by PoeticXTC
4 Jan 2006, 4:11 PM
You forgot to describe yourself as like a niggard with money and a wet back when working.
replying on light [edited] by lmp
4 Jan 2006, 4:02 PM
"My love's eyes are nothing like the sun".-Shakespeare
on light [edited] by lmp
4 Jan 2006, 3:57 PM
Lose the "The".
Nice Haiku.
Nice Haiku.
on Shut Me Up by D. $ Fontera
4 Jan 2006, 3:53 PM
It's perfect in a plain and ordinary kind of way.
replying on The Forgetting by Dovina
4 Jan 2006, 3:27 PM
I've already admitted that I'm a bit of a contradiction. That's my conundrum.
replying on The Forgetting by Dovina
4 Jan 2006, 3:24 PM
Some words just never look right to me unless I spell them wrong.
"their" is another one. I always want to spell it as "thier". It's not that I see words backwords or jumbled anymore. I just sometimes remember them mixed up. So reading isn't hard for me although it's probably a little slower but writing is a bit harder. One of the reasons I started writing poetry was for practice.
"their" is another one. I always want to spell it as "thier". It's not that I see words backwords or jumbled anymore. I just sometimes remember them mixed up. So reading isn't hard for me although it's probably a little slower but writing is a bit harder. One of the reasons I started writing poetry was for practice.