i think the problem with this poem is that it has no ending yet. i had cut the last stanza (there were 3 originally) and now need to amend the second one or add a new third. still a work-in-progress.

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the mood is working.....but line 3 of s2 /hoot hollow like an owl? I notice/ ........ actually most of s2 needs reworking... I love the image of the blueprint of the inside and the image of this person turning into themselves, turning away...... keep going with this it has potential