You're awfully critical today. I don't like this poem much either...in fact, I think it's pretty lousy. I didn't say I'm good with forms...this is the first time I've actually used them. And for your concern, I haven't been teaching old people how to write pantoums. I primarily write prose and screenplays.

What notion...time? What are you talking about, and what does it have to do with Parkinson's disease? Are you trying to sound clever, or just condescending?

I've read that poem, and Dylan Thomas sticks to the form pretty tightly, but he, too, makes minor changes in some of the repeated lines, doesn't he? Some poets write what they call vilanelles and they don't even rhyme; it covers a broad spectrum. People write sonnets now with 18 lines. The form is a jumping off point. This was my first attempt in class this semester, and I think I stuck to it pretty closely.