| Re: Suburban Horror by phbiscuit |
15-Aug-03/12:51 AM |
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The end was a toss, and you need an i in patiently, otherwise some very good parts. 7.
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| Re: unbroken by roses are read |
15-Aug-03/12:47 AM |
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Good, but it could use an edit. 8.
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| Re: Young America by Wulf |
13-Aug-03/10:29 AM |
"precursor of death, self condemnation" "of" could be 'to'or 'for'.
"those whom choose an other path" "an" could 'the'.
"and the prostitute you have all ways been" 'always' would work better. Although. I do think that was a rather creative way of saying it also.
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| Re: The Musician by Carvaceous |
13-Aug-03/10:34 AM |
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Just one. More obos and less fodder.
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| Re: what is meant to be after me by Prince of Void |
14-Aug-03/1:55 PM |
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Well, that was a cupped handfull of steaming hot piss.
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14-Aug-03/12:30 PM |
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| Re: Goldenshoes Shane by dantron |
15-Aug-03/11:32 AM |
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| Re: The Smurfs killed Kennedy by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
15-Aug-03/11:34 AM |
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| Re: A Sonnet For Santa Claus, Who Hates Jesus, But Likes When You Buy Things by snacktime |
15-Aug-03/11:36 AM |
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Satan Claws 8 Hayzeus 4 brakefeast.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
15-Aug-03/11:44 AM |
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Ha! ha ha ha...ahhh. What?
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| Re: Fuck Me Like Love Fucks Me (changed) by Son Of A Bitch |
15-Aug-03/11:47 AM |
"Scores on the headboard" change 'headboard' to gilded loom.
Perhaps you should be spayed or nuetered?
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
14-Aug-03/8:09 PM |
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woosh roof, poop on me face, I thunk I sawn me a pooping star.
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14-Aug-03/12:36 PM |
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That was some jive ass shit mother fucker.
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15-Aug-03/12:44 AM |
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Well, it got a four. I couldn't quite make out the challenge. Could you be more specific? the number 8 is for my hate beyond all dates and infinite (I bet you said infinate) aint strait it's a muthafucking all scratched & crooked. In Florida I once caught a snook it's in my pants you can take a look. The eight is for the inches and the whore provides the winches that it takes to crane me out of bed. Waking up is hard to do. When all you do all day... And every day, is pure MURDER.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
13-Aug-03/10:32 AM |
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Men cannot become demons or angels. They are two different creatures entirely, but NICE TRY U!
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13-Aug-03/10:37 AM |
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No, I don't remember anything.
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13-Aug-03/10:40 AM |
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"momories" possibly the funniest and best accidentilly created word to date. Otherwise your poem is a dead and bloating yak.
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13-Aug-03/2:54 AM |
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I like that restaurant, and especially rape.
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| Re: drought on talkin river by richa |
14-Aug-03/8:11 PM |
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| Re: Darkness by Felzpoet |
15-Aug-03/12:53 AM |
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