on Para Sa Aking Sinta by NewbieMe
3 Apr 2003, 12:03 PM
Could you please not be so boringly ethnic? It makes my morning coffee chill more rapidly. That alone is reason enough to attack you with powerful black magick... And tuna bagels.
on some deleted poem
3 Apr 2003, 12:09 PM
He's here chubby cheeked son naturally. He charges me three dollars a goal in soccer. Unfortunately, I ran out of dough before he ran out of kick. (I changed Gamma to queen A's at the web site GW).
on The nature of Nuture by cleverdevice
3 Apr 2003, 12:47 PM
I'd lose "No more bothers."
But then again I have an Oedipus complex.
But then again I have an Oedipus complex.
on F**K The World by loneshadow29
3 Apr 2003, 12:51 PM
What happened? Did they blow up your Indonesion Disco too?
on Our Sweet Lady Lispalot by lunar
3 Apr 2003, 12:54 PM
Rapunthel.
on How Strange by T. Becquerel
3 Apr 2003, 3:09 PM
How about how jessica Lynch hails from Palestine West Virginia? Isn't that Lynchianly appropriate? A quote from her dad "those folks that rescued my daughter were a brave bunch of people" I wonder how he's going to feel with an ethnic son or daughter in nine months. Let's take a moment to pray shall we. Dear whoever wherever could you please give me more psychic powers so that i may change my channel without getting up or looking for the remote. Thankyou, oh and could you give the rag heads some back ground music to their machine gun dance the next time a farmer shoots down an apache with a sling shot. It would help me absorb their glee a whole lot more since i've been warped by music television and the family feud. In the name of the father, the son and the holy toast (i mean spirit as in grey goose chilled without a glass). thank you lordy.
on Me against Me by TruthlessHero
6 Apr 2003, 4:45 PM
Well, I came to read this thinking Mrs. garbage found something interesting, and I was right! a one for effort!
on STAR WARS by Garrett S Sexton
6 Apr 2003, 5:38 PM
If I was not so depressed, this would have depressed me. I did smile slightly, although, it hurt my fece'.
on some deleted poem
6 Apr 2003, 5:40 PM
It's a shame we're shamed.
on Mirrored Immage by poetofthestar
6 Apr 2003, 5:47 PM
a brilliant ennui.
on i cant' let him go by roses are red
6 Apr 2003, 5:50 PM
There is a place beyond all of this pitter patter. That place is life on the planet Earth. Try it.
on Pipedream by TruthlessHero
6 Apr 2003, 5:53 PM
No. The path of the grey and the red are forbidden to pick, hence, why they are that color.
on Rebuttal by TruthlessHero
6 Apr 2003, 6:04 PM
All life is temporary, and when it's pure shit out the gate it's kind of hard to tell when the payback is happening fuckface, because it never stopped, or started, it just always was. Is this your way of making a point? Because if it is? You are either projecting your own closeted insecurities about yout identity and penis size, or even worse, an uninformed self righteous security guard at walmart taking a wack at poetry. better stick with the shoplifters. I bet you thought you'd never have something in common with why farmers invented scarecrows huh? Moron.
on some deleted poem
6 Apr 2003, 7:51 PM
"To you my arms I have spread.
I am in need of your bread." keep this and erase the rest immediately.
To turn gold into lead
The vagina went red.
I removed my fist
then made a grocery list.
I am in need of your bread." keep this and erase the rest immediately.
To turn gold into lead
The vagina went red.
I removed my fist
then made a grocery list.
on some deleted poem
6 Apr 2003, 7:55 PM
By the way, religion was created to keep people from thinking about what's really going on around them, and judging from the body of your work it has been successful.
The stink of irony is so powerful that when I fainted a second ago I didn't fall because the smell, being so physically present, held me up.
The stink of irony is so powerful that when I fainted a second ago I didn't fall because the smell, being so physically present, held me up.
on A Love Story For The Dead by Caducus
6 Apr 2003, 8:29 PM
"And seagulls cried as the boy started to wave." it had ahold of me until this line. Then I just laughed. You might consider losing it. Seriously.
on the photobooth by Bill Z Bub
6 Apr 2003, 8:35 PM
Great title and equally written to maintain that fact.I would of gave it a nine, but I see you are still writing it so... later i guess i might.
on papercut suicide by papercut
6 Apr 2003, 9:06 PM
You could add double the amount of the already doubled amount of simplistic adjectives that you used in this piece and still not manage to cut yourself. Perhaps instead you'll cut the cheese.
on some deleted poem
6 Apr 2003, 9:14 PM
Awesome, and yes I want to punch him, shit in his bloody mouth, then light him on fire with a 9 volt battery and some naipalm. after that, i'll eat his breasts and penis with some hot mustard and a chilled chardonay. Hopefully the smell of burnt hair will still be lingering before the desert, charred eyeball on a stick with parfait.
on some deleted poem
6 Apr 2003, 9:26 PM
What is this? A metaphor for sucking cock after you've cleansed it with some pinesol?