Re: a comment on i will not come to bangladesh by lost in america	7-Mar-03/11:30 PM
Frozen justification? I didn't know they wired the mammoth to talk? Interesting. You ever see Ringo Starr in that Caveman movie? Funny shite, mang.
Re: a comment on i will not come to bangladesh by lost in america	7-Mar-03/11:26 PM
Sir, are you mad dogging the mob? Perhaps i am conducting an experiment. What if i said part of me likes this poem, and part of me hates it. The good news is the best comment you got was from da. your problem is right there. In other words, the style and structure is completely gauche, and artisticaly 'safe' Either go total concrete, or make the structure serve your words and story here, because that's where the good shit is. Here's a ten. Now Skiddadal. I never said you had to like anything. I'm just messing around with new theories of and within communication, lacking audio, and visual identification upon a computer. This was only a test.
Re: Keanu Vs The mystery of life by Shardik	7-Mar-03/11:17 PM
Oh Shardik... You trap baiter you. Must your mind live at the Cirkle K Try Chapstick from my ass You know? I just love Oprah. Want a Chocodile?
Re: Unholy War by marvelis	7-Mar-03/9:52 PM
I never knew there was a holy war?
Re: a comment on The deafening silence in the world or something by Bachus	7-Mar-03/9:27 PM
Yes, I know. It troubles me too. We should do something about it! You know? Clean up this filthy town... Whatta yeah say? I hear this scoundrel Bachus has gone mad... Apparently with a kale gun at the private school. In the private boys shavery. We can only hope they're all not vegetarian pussys. Coming up with off the cuff degeneratively rude chirpings like that. The nerve. All over my chesapeke chaps and scarf. Mother fuckers. We don't need no stinking badges. Hey lets count this. It could be a 69 er!c
Re: As the Redwood Ages by DurtKL	7-Mar-03/10:03 AM
Dry semen, i feel, works much better then name dropping, or cornholing deities that simply just do not play a role any longer in our well being. God does not talk. No-doz? don't punk out, just take the real thing. your imagery here, though fastly sought out i'm sure through hours of sleepless research. was like eating a mouthful of jelly beans, with meatloaf, and champagne while listening to Gobi desert sound bites on lsd and then sand papering ones elbows. Great job. 7.
Re: a comment on Aries, the God of war by Shardik	7-Mar-03/9:48 AM
it's a hoofed spin i invented off of heaving. a mixed word between hovering, hove, hoof, and heaved. past and past part of heave, but now in the present, to be heaving in an uncertain state, a hybrid word. one word out of twelve? i hardly call that masking now mr. foster. i believe it set's up the fear of war when going into it's cousin word upon the page, census.
Re: just as we were by daniella	7-Mar-03/12:18 AM
"meagre" other then that little glitch which practically works well enough any way. Great poem!
Re: Sofia by daniella	7-Mar-03/12:15 AM
Really lovely. 10!
Re: No Sense by daniella	7-Mar-03/12:12 AM
Afterword 1 (Free verse) by daniella He slides his step to the side, and a heart skips its beating. Like a bird lying lame on the wet winter hour of dawn. Like no approach he comes, like a tongue withdrawn. No sense, no truth, no arms to hold on. On a mission of mercy up over. The newest light is mounting up to correct the marks left for another. Try that.
Re: Anouk by daniella	7-Mar-03/12:08 AM
Charming.
Re: Death From Above by Jimbo	6-Mar-03/8:54 PM
a bit long, but quality. I could edit a version of this for you.
Re: a comment on Text Messages Sent by blueENDyellow	6-Mar-03/12:24 AM
That's his way of keeping you from talking to his ass, decent poem by the way. A bit session nine, but so were the jetson's right? 8.
Re: a comment on Sweet, Sweet... Daddy by Jeremi B. Handrinos	6-Mar-03/12:13 AM
_O |_ (*)\_ + hatred divided by love makes jack a dull boy.
Re: a comment on Sweet, Sweet... Daddy by Jeremi B. Handrinos	6-Mar-03/12:05 AM
Tsk... You have clearly been bested kind sir. A gentlemen does not soil anothers hankerchief when he has a cold and leaky parson's nose. He waits to diddle the help on the way out, and snout kick his prize hunting hound. You are clearly out of line, and I demand satasfaction! ` -/ 0 ` .. (-)(-)::1::2::3::4::5::6::7::8::9]=}------_/\_ Thanks, from my chair to yours.
Re: The Fire Giver by OneFingerAnswer	5-Mar-03/3:29 PM
Yes. "I'm glad you metioned the content because I want to get that out of the way early. This isn't about God and Satan as dieties or religious figures. Rather it's about "good" and "bad." One way I was taking it was the idea that good behavior doesn't attract much attention. I actually had one of my classmates from highschool in mind. He was a "good kid" and all through high school he was B/C average. Three days before graduation he ran himself into a tree in the car his parents had bought him as a graduation present. He lived through it even though he hadn't meant to. When I asked him why he did it he said "To be remembered." To be honest, I think it worked." by the way this is profound, thanks, i understand now. Sorry about earlier my brain is acting up again.
Re: a comment on Prometheus sang for vultures by horus8	5-Mar-03/12:40 PM
Well, well. I am not a man. I never was. And as for shame? Shame on you. This reminds me of the day i over heard Ebola and AIDS having a detailed conversation during happy hour at the tgi friday's down the way a bit. and i quote AIDS - what do you mean they have a new cocktail? EBOLA - I'M SICK OF THIS FANCY SHIT FOR FUCK'S SAKE I JUST WANT A BLOODY MARY. (BUBONIC PLAGUE COMES IN AND SITS NEXT TO THEM) PLAGUE- (TO THE OTHERS) HEY FELLOWS (TO BARTENDER) GIVE ME A BLACK RUSSIAN. aids and ebola JUST LOOK AT ONE ANOTHER AND LAUGH. Settle, i have more shame then the lead singer of great white without his favorite bandana.
Re: a comment on Extended Stay (the motel) by THE GOD OF DEATH	5-Mar-03/12:18 PM
Don't get me wrong. I like it really, you have woven a finely crafted tale of superb stereotyping and thought provoking inuendo's but in actuality I don't believe that you have the inside lane on what these people have went through. Which leaves a bit of a silly taste in my mouth. Now, obviously i don't believe you to be a chigger on any level. don't be ridiculous. i'm just stating my opinion. i'm not one of these poets bent on explaining pointless rhyme explanations or pentametor. I am not one to argue Neoclassic from Romantic or imitation to intentional fallacy. I consider most poets at six having the ability to rhyme in some creative way, thus it's like math professors discussing simple arithmitic so, point being, when you came over to my poem and started talking rhyme gibberish and all of this other simpleton rubbish i was a bit perturbed, that is all. Poetry is hardly about rhyming. It is an art form used by god's to create entire galaxies. it is magical and should not be taken lightly by dentists or asians anywhere lest they go blind and mad. When you can write a Roman A` Clef get back to me. Durt or God of death or betty or whoever. What i know is people, and you knew very few of the people you presented here in this tale even remotely (maybe one). This is all my opinion, and i am entitled to it. What i am saying in all 'tenses possible' is don't come shit on my yard and not expect me to piss on your fence.
Re: a comment on Extended Stay (the motel) by THE GOD OF DEATH	5-Mar-03/12:01 PM
"From above, the mechanic rhythm Of another's ecstacy, As empty as the one below. The old man, to be young again, Takes pleasure in the act, While the woman Underneath Prays for its end. Her prayer is answered With a gasp and a shudder, As the squeaks decrescendo To a soft pianissimo" this forced a giggle though. through clenched perfect teeth of course, the squeek of the fecund.
Re: a comment on Extended Stay (the motel) by THE GOD OF DEATH	5-Mar-03/9:52 AM
No, i liked the poem Mr. or Mrs. God of death. it's just that well i don't try and write about flying the space shuttle because i haven't granted i could imagine. Now, my point is that theory also applies to your mediocre and one sided grasp of heroin addiction in this poem. It's obvious to me that you've never shot up heroin, or have been close to someone who was a hard core h-addict on any level (and don't give me thaT I'M THE ASIAN DRAGon chaser shit because i see right through it, and this poem, and your face). That was all. oh i meant my mom not yours. i'm the wigger, chiggeri