on some deleted poem
9 Sep 2002, 9:58 PM
Hot damn, PAKI, you're on a writing binge this evening. Two for you.
on Here In The Heart of Amber by Lenore
23 Sep 2002, 10:56 AM
Right on, Lenore. Would "death, life are one" help rhythm? Also, do you want to capitalize Amber, suggesting a woman's name, or leave as lower case, and thus up to the reader's imagination?
on some deleted poem
23 Sep 2002, 7:39 AM
Lovely, GW. I'm currently working on a tune with my band that's a mambo; never have figured out all the tango, mambo, samba, differences. This poem has a lilting rhythm. Would a comma go well after "The wind,..." ?
on some deleted poem
19 Sep 2002, 10:07 AM
We men may be able to set our watches by ya'll's moods, but which timezone would we end up in? Eastern Aphrodite Time. Very good poem.
on Bitter as Wormwood by vulcan
20 Sep 2002, 12:30 PM
I like it, Vlcn. I just sampled some brewed wormwood extractive from a local herbal school here in northern Virginia; it was bitter. I'll have to check out Blok's work.
on Bathroom Angel Crusade by royalflesh
19 Sep 2002, 6:25 PM
You've got creative, scary ideas. Much better than some others who've tried this sort of poetry on this site.
on some deleted poem
18 Sep 2002, 1:33 PM
Dangit, now I've given Darko a 7, my highest vote for him, yet, but only because of the mirth inducing relevance of this poeme to H8's absurd alter ego bio. This is what I LOVE on p'ranker; one site roach negativist flailing at another. Perhaps we can get PAKI and Dylm involved and the whole tangling ball of puss that these cranky, whining fucks are will go rolling off the edge of the virtual landscape forever.
on Like and Unlike by Christof
12 Sep 2002, 7:14 PM
I like your poetry, Christof. Not sure I understand 'unknown dully', though. How about 'as a moth's wing'? I think of a butterfly's wing as being colourful, not mottled. I reread your poems, dood.
on A Dream Awakened by impaired
12 Sep 2002, 7:36 PM
Impaired, if couples could have relationships like this, there'd be no divorce.
on some deleted poem
12 Sep 2002, 9:05 PM
I like your poetry, and this poem. I've reread it, yet can't understand the last lines; however, I find a little obscura cast by this site's better poets a tasty challenge.
on Mermaid at Dawn by <~>
11 Sep 2002, 9:12 PM
You do the blue poetry so well. Make every word count; you're so close.
on A missing puzzle piece. by trev086
11 Sep 2002, 9:04 PM
Thanks for writing something on this issue, Trev; you've got more guts than I do. What is the addition to our heart?
on some deleted poem
9 Sep 2002, 9:13 PM
I like the openly shared emotions and sense of connectedness to others your poems evoke, GW. Makes me think of Dylan T.'s 'After the Funeral.'
on Russian Roulette by <~>
9 Sep 2002, 9:23 PM
The tragedy and harrowing experience reflected here saddens the reader; but, the quality of your writing provides energizing redemption. 'Crazy, maybe... but surely kind' certainly reminds me of people I've known.
on My cousin's baby sitter. by Bachus
9 Sep 2002, 9:26 PM
Misogynistic pap.
on some deleted poem
9 Sep 2002, 9:36 PM
This may not be a Haiku, but I like it's unabashed directness. How about 'God; loving kindness...But, I'll likely go to hell...Where was my error?
on Original words (spectacularly stolen) by Bachus
18 Sep 2002, 1:20 PM
Alright, dammit, I'm starting to like your shite. Mute nostril agony.