on gerbil by betty swallox
11 Nov 2002, 6:27 AM
funny. (but wrong rhyme scheme to be a limerick.)
on Picnic Of Love by -=SeTTle=-
11 Nov 2002, 6:26 AM
my god, man! get your meds adjusted for the sake of all that is sacred and profane!
on I Respect Your Feelings As A Woman And A Human by -=SeTTle=-
11 Nov 2002, 6:24 AM
this bit is just not working for you settle. sorry. no poontang for you.
on My Woman, My Lover, My Friend by -=SeTTle=-
11 Nov 2002, 6:23 AM
you're kidding, right?
replying on Perversions by razorgrin
9 Nov 2002, 6:33 PM
what's 'yurming'?
replying on Perversions by razorgrin
9 Nov 2002, 6:29 PM
i am at that point, between paychecks, where i have started drinking my sister's coors light. there are no longer any innocents, anywhere. unless one of you would like to buy me an IPA? or a scotch, neat?
replying on My cousin's baby sitter. by Bachus
9 Nov 2002, 5:00 PM
there there, h. any time you want someone to really trammel you, you let mistress z know. my rates are quite reasonable, and i have a cellar full of merlot.
on Plastic People by cosmiccantinaguy
9 Nov 2002, 2:42 PM
this is the angriest poem i've ever read. got a solution, or just a problem?
on My Kites On Grandmother's Four-poster Bed by anitawit
9 Nov 2002, 2:36 PM
pretty scenes and memories
on Determination by Birdman42s
9 Nov 2002, 2:33 PM
you lose the rhythm in the last stanza
on (no title) by savagelymakeitcount
8 Nov 2002, 9:05 PM
this feels like a lyric, but wears a little thin at the end.
on Hve you ever..... v2 by INTRANSIT
8 Nov 2002, 1:45 PM
this feel like it wants to be 'may the road always rise to meet you' in flavor, but it's too uneven. needs more cohesive structuring, and less fragmented thinking. make it more lyrical, if that is the effect you were going for...
replying on Perversions by razorgrin
8 Nov 2002, 1:02 PM
don't forget to eat some corn, if you're going to get it on whit the scat-thang. makes for interesting contrasts.
p.s. leave the damn innocents alone.
p.s. leave the damn innocents alone.
replying on Of the opposition. Zipcode graffitti by Bachus
7 Nov 2002, 1:29 PM
you are either foisting or hiding. which will it be?
on Of the opposition. Zipcode graffitti by Bachus
7 Nov 2002, 12:25 PM
i'm calling you on this one. fess up. NOW-uh!!!
on Cantos part mmx (The Mud Poem) by bondjedi
7 Nov 2002, 12:17 PM
such a voyage of discovery! i like my early morning exploits much more than the ones you write of. to each his own, though.
on i am genius personified by bondjedi
7 Nov 2002, 12:15 PM
i never calimed to be a genius. if i were one, and i had written this, i would have omitted the hypen; it is not clever. and so, i shall rank you and in so doing, also rank myself.
on VINTAGE by bonsaimirror
7 Nov 2002, 12:14 PM
and wine turns to vinegar when exposed to air.