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on Pina Colada Belle by Don-Quixote 10 Aug 2003, 3:13 AM
Slightly disappointed DQ (not the poem but the footnote)

Don Quixote would never apologize, too immersed in what he is to be anything but brave.

Sometimes we are what we are, expectant filter be damned. A 0 until you remove the apology. :)
on Restraint by Retaliate 2 Sep 2003, 12:32 AM
Slower and leSS SalaciouS careSS... umm yummy
Shizzolate that mofo.
on blue lilac and I (edit) by richa 7 Aug 2003, 8:23 PM
Very nice richa.

E-minor is a chord, by the way, which would take multiple instruments to hear.

This is unfortunate because the poem really enjoys having a solitary instrument, but also benefits from recognizing specifically an e-minor feel.

Perhaps:
'and picking from the still air
a dorian scent of trombone'

(Dorian is a mode that has a minoresque feel to it and can be played with a series of notes on a single instrument.)
on God is a Lady by thepinkbunnyofdoom 7 Aug 2003, 12:51 PM
Not much of a lady if she's playing with yours, is she? :)
I am your patron saint. I absolve you.