I wonder what it would sound like to music :)

I can't tell you how much I like this poem. . .10

Cute poem! I kinda like how Shmuel shortened it, I think you could still incorporate a part about God though, since that is important to you, just maybe do it from an angle that fits with the poem better

What a sweet poem, I can tell you put a lot of feeling into it, thanks for sharing

beautiful, and it flows so easily

two thumbs up, wish I could express myself through poem more

cute, like the parts about it being like a painting or pastel drawing

good, but I bet you could smooth it out a little more 8

First I read it too fast but when I read it one more time and gave some thought to it I could feel it more and I liked it

Whoa, enjoyable. I really liked the last too lines to top it off. I would have been able to read it better with a little punctuation. . .but I'm sure when you read it out loud it's there

never thought I could like a poem about a rat so much!

made me snicker.

I like some of the ideas and the memories that you are talking about, but it kind of falls apart and rambles a little towards the end. I bet you could put it together better.

It's crap, all crap. . .no just teasing I like it, and I'll be checking back later to see it finished I'm sure

I like the train metaphor, I would suggest working some more train related words in there and maybe working with the flow a little

liked the "bull moo." Maybe use another word instead of "cracked" twice

I don't know did we really all do "the best we could"? do we really breath out thanksgiving? and give thanks everytime we pray?

Kinda like something in this. why was green the color you picked though? Just wondering

I like the first 3 lines and the last one too, but I've seen your other poems . . .I know you can do better.

I like it. . . I just don't get what you are saying in the 4th and 5th to last lines. . .8