on some deleted poem
11 Nov 2003, 10:58 AM
oh! *shivers* That was wonderful: very descriptive, and a nice little shock at the end for me. You've a beautiful command of language.
on some deleted poem
11 Nov 2003, 11:02 AM
Oh, boy! Aside from tearing me between two emotions(sadness, because it's true, and laughter, because it was carried off so well), this was wonderful, and true.
on guilty mind by Angel_of_fait
11 Nov 2003, 10:45 AM
I don't want to be harsh, but you've got a few serious spelling errors, and it's just not good form to use "u" instead of "you". I would suggest that you run this through spell checker, and... redo the formatting. The lines would flow better if you said "Lay your head on the bed,
Sleep with the dead" instead of keeping that all one line. Granted, that's just my opinion, but I would consider doing those things and then reposting it.
Sleep with the dead" instead of keeping that all one line. Granted, that's just my opinion, but I would consider doing those things and then reposting it.
on some deleted poem
11 Nov 2003, 10:49 AM
It really didn't seem that creative to me: the language was uninspired and the rhyming was juvenile.
on Styx by heartlessempath
17 Nov 2003, 5:03 AM
Thank you very much! I think that was one of my favorite lines too.