Re: a comment on The Snow Queen by Angeline	31-May-04/7:06 PM
The best is a novel called "Larry's Party". I'd start there.
Re: Vibrissae by ggawrysi	31-May-04/12:27 PM
What are you? A hamster? A Scottish midget?
Re: The Snow Queen by Angeline	31-May-04/12:21 PM
"See no more than him" means they only see him. I think you mean "See no more than he," which has an invisible "does" after. Maybe you didn't. But after starting with him being blind, that kind of follows. On the whole this one is quite a bit weaker than your others (which I wanted to say are totally ace.) The parenthesis bit is really good, though. Have you read the late, excellent Canadian novelist Carol Shields? You should. She used that parentheses image several times.
Re: a comment on Sir Magnedrol vs. The Dragon (part 1) by Phalkon	31-May-04/12:11 PM
Or this one: The prosecutor dribbles, dribbles Crumbs from his pendulous jowls, Of the delicacies he nibbles (nibbles!) On break from his courtroom quibbles (quibbles!) And looks o'er the Park and scowls, (Shudders and growls, "Bother and bow'ls!") At the gay, uncivilised play Of St James's waterfowls. And shakes his pendulous head and dribbles Crumbs from his quivering jowls.
Re: a comment on Suicide of the Ego by Drifting Shadow	31-May-04/4:48 AM
I'm not, you boob. I'm returning here to redeem myself in the eyes of comments-recent for my earlier over-earnest stupidity on this page (ie, starting this so-called conversation in the first place.)
Re: a comment on Suicide of the Ego by Drifting Shadow	31-May-04/4:45 AM
You colossal boob! (black fog: "Look! I'm pressing your buttons again!" zodiac: "Shut the fuck up.") For one thing, my life is so intensely happy it actually makes me wonder ALL THE TIME what's up with all these people talking about 'the path to happiness' and such bullshit. How can they be so incredibly wrongheaded as to not already have a life that's as happy as the one I have without even trying? So, no, I HAVE NO QUESTIONS. YOU HAVE NOTHING YOU CAN TEACH ME. If I changed anything about my life, it could only make it less happy than it currently is, you see? Even now, when you think I'm agonizing over your pinpoint-accurate reading of me, I am quietly, beatifically happy. Naturally, lacking anything which even roughly approximates an awareness of irony and humor, you are not going to believe me. Go take a flying leap into a wall. I am most certainly not really my poemranker self. And for another thing, "you can go away now zodiac, we have no further interest in you" and "So go on....tell them that you won...when you could have taken something for your mind from here, so in fact you have lost" are my jokes from May 29, only made much, much more dumb. (black fog: "That's because I'm a master of manipulation." zodiac: "If you were an utter retarded instead of such a 'master of manipulation,' would it make your retarded poemranker rambles in any wise different?" Everyone: "No.") If the Joe-joe model of 'discourse' (ie, repeating others' lines a few days later, adopting some fake fatherly condescension, changing the subject frequently, assuming without justification or proof that you've "won" already) is the best you have - well, you will, of course, still die of natural causes at a ripe old age with your wife and beautiful children at your side after having been as happy as anyone else (except me) most of that time, but you will also have been a blissfully ignorant retarded for nearly a century and let me tell you something: When on that great gettin'-up morning the Lord Jesus separates the Retardeds from the Non-Retardeds and invites the Non-Retardeds to come to him an nuzzle in his clean clove-smelling beard, WE WILL SEE WHO'S LAUGHING!!!!!!1!!!!!!!!11!!1!1!!!1!!!!!!1! Oh God, I've soiled myself again...
Re: a comment on Suicide of the Ego by Drifting Shadow	31-May-04/4:39 AM
"And I doubt it brainwashed him anyway" LOL!!!! Oh, my!
Re: Sir Magnedrol vs. The Dragon (part 1) by Phalkon	30-May-04/3:49 PM
The main problems with this poem are that the thing with the pronunciation guide for the names is ridiculous; you should know how to pronounce it when you see it. So "Pondrine" should be "Pondreh Ni" or something such, "Taeks" should be "Taieks," and "Aark" should definitely be "Gaydvark". Leaving them lower-case doesn't help. And no one should be given a particular name just to make a rhyme. Also, your poem is sadly lacking in pointlessly repeated words and jarring exclamatories. See how much better the following verse sounds than yours. The Elvish Prince went riding, riding, Riding out to the sea. Full many a worthy fellow had he! A ranger, a dwarf, and mages three Had he in his hurrying company. And their stealthy cloaks went gliding, gliding (Through hollow and tree! Fum! fettle! fee!) As the Elvish Lord went riding, riding Out to the Western Sea.
Re: a comment on A Dangling Poo by zodiac	30-May-04/3:28 PM
I wish I had a digital version of this, though. Unfortunately, I only recorded it on analog four-track with tamborine, kazoo, bongos, and some fake Ace of Base-style German industrial vocals on the pre-chorus. Seriously. It totally rules.
Re: a comment on A Dangling Poo by zodiac	30-May-04/3:26 PM
I'm sick of that band already. When I move to the Land of Islams next month, I'm going to record bumpin' House tracks with some female Islam doing that weird wailing thing they do. You can't beat that shit!
Re: a comment on GENTLE JANE by titan69	30-May-04/3:22 PM
Why the hell not? It's not like you could've gotten laid by this girl but then since you called her a "bull dyke," which she was, now she's giving it up vociferously to your roommate instead while you're pretending to sleep on the bottom bunk and wondering when they'll go to the bathroom so you can sneak out and sleep in the entryway. Insulting gayos can have no negative but only positive consequences. I say, don't hold back! Let the bummers and flannelled double-enders have it!
Re: a comment on Suicide of the Ego by Drifting Shadow	30-May-04/3:13 PM
re: "maybe because you think you got it right... but then you did look and saw you weren't right?...." Nope. Because the misspelled "dysfunction" above was by you. To wit, "black fog: Ha-ha! I'm the winner! etc etc etc disfunction etc etc etc." Then I realized I didn't care, and it would just prompt you to post three more retarded and frankly boring rambles about how much you like fishing. I see I overestimated by one.
Re: a comment on dancing on air by killingjuliet	30-May-04/3:08 PM
Could you tell me what's wrong with the Yorkshire school system? The last guy we had here from Yorkshire was a complete dunce at spelling, too.
Re: a comment on Blinking by zodiac	30-May-04/3:04 PM
If I ever have a chance to live alone again, I'm going to spend every minute I'm at home with my cock hanging out of my pants. I figure it must be much more comfortable than being totally newd or appropriately clothed.
Re: Should A Ramble Make Sense? by Blindpoetry	30-May-04/4:44 AM
No. But one should not ramble. Stellar use of exclamation marks, though. As always.
Re: you by killingjuliet	30-May-04/4:42 AM
Hi, welcome to poemranker, and stellar poem! I've developed a really ultra-stellar tool to help budding poets in their writing, and posted it at this URL: http://tinyurl.com/ywr5z. Good luck and keep up the stellar work!
Re: lost in the riptide by killingjuliet	30-May-04/4:39 AM
Not as stellar as the other ones, I'm afraid.
Re: GENTLE JANE by titan69	30-May-04/4:37 AM
The most stellar ode about finding out a girl's gay and yelling "you bitch" on poemranker, minus 2.
Re: dancing on air by killingjuliet	30-May-04/4:36 AM
Sweet and quietly stellar.
Re: a comment on Sir Magnedrol vs. The Dragon (part 1) by Phalkon	29-May-04/5:57 PM
I'd jack up the grammar inducers by at least half. Your comments read like old samurai film subtitles. And what do you mean by "things can be 'dulled' without be 'non-sharp'" anyway?