poemranker ::Washing-up Hands and Disgruntled Underarms by fevriere

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Washing-up Hands and Disgruntled Underarms

Member since 2004 · Posted 14 May 2004 · Edited 14 May 2004 · 3 comments

Scars won't fade fast And in the summertime, the one on her cheek Is bright as paint, is red as lips. Her face refuses to be quiet: she wishes her scar was white as milk gentle; Godly; girly. She wishes she was holding hands. She wishes she was sharing kisses. She wishes she was Audrey Hepburn. Milky. No, darling, the taste in her mouth is spicy and sour And her palms sweat like butter in the heat. No, darling, that girl's a bad bad one, That girl's night inside. She's not quite real yet. She's no white hart. She's no milk-weeping Virgin statue.

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3 comments

[9] Shuushin 14-May-04/2:06 PM Reply
did you mean "hart" is in a male [red] deer?

quite nice, though maybe a few too many "is"s and "was"s
[9] richa 15-May-04/6:02 AM Reply
very good, nice use of language, I think that is important.

Not sure about 'milky' as a sentence in its own right. Sounds like some mad persons catchphrase.
[n/a] fevriere › richa 5-Jan-05/12:19 PM Reply
Now you put it that way..