poemranker ::Just Like Before by cuddlytiger17

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Just Like Before

by cuddlytiger17

Member since 2004 · Posted 18 May 2004 · 5 comments

You deceived me just like before Told me those times would be no more Said that you weren’t like the rest And that this was for the best But you're just a hypocrite With lines so easily spit You ridicule me for everything I’ve done You might as well just hand me the gun Because you're pushing me to the limit And I can’t take any more of it You're destroying me day by day Yet you expect me to stay You're calling me the crazy one But I’d only be crazy if I DIDN’T run You say you're afraid I’ll harm myself But staying here’s suicide in itself I think it’s fairly obvious to us all That my leaving shouldn’t be stalled Because this was all a big mistake And this tormented soul's about to break.

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[9] zodiac 19-May-04/1:36 PM Reply
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[8] wilco 19-May-04/3:25 PM Reply
You're getting better. Just try not to force the rhymes so much.
[n/a] cuddlytiger17 19-May-04/5:16 PM Reply
Thanks guys, but these still aren't new ones. I've been working on a few here and there, but nothing I'm willing to post. I appreciate the encouragement and suggestions, it really does help.
[9] sliver 20-May-04/12:55 PM Reply
Remind me not to piss you off, or teach you how to load black powder.
[n/a] cuddlytiger17 › sliver 20-May-04/4:40 PM Reply
LMAO nice sliver. too bad i already know how to load black powder :p lol I'm j/p with ya.