poemranker ::Path by Rlee

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Free verse № 10489

Path

Member since 2002 · Posted 21 Aug 2002 · 1 comment

Path Off the beaten path My heart satin box is light Seeking blue ribbon horizons Under weary plague Cured----- for now Hot roadside dust clinging Filling the well of this soul I found the wrong side played too long Turning into a one way mile circled to the beginning Long lost friend standing here again. The hillside hum pierced my ear ??? hollow Sung sweetly to a distant yesteryear I ache wild- like a pony --- express Destined, escaping briefly the trap doors in life. Jealous draped green etched as a guide bringing the blind masses on my journey I test fate using my compass sense Pulled to an unseen conclusion Knowing no bound to direction Loosely gliding always trying -----to capture Home inside one's self. Thick haze filters in mockingly Take me back, take me back Off the beaten path

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[0] god'swife 21-Aug-02/7:18 PM Reply
throw this away and start over. I sense you have something valuable to say, but it's lost amid the self-agrandizing word play. Stick to the idea you're trying to express. Less is mucho mas more.