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Free verse № 105161

You and I

Member since 2003 · Posted 13 Jun 2004 · Edited 14 Jun 2004 · 3 comments

Who would've thought that in the heart of this building Which accomodates a thousand people's desire, We would meet each other with a laughter and a tear You, the virgin mind incarnate And I, the ostentatious fool And how long had it been since we last met: A few days, a week, countless moments? And still you bestow on me that familiar smile Given only to those whose familiarity you had accepted And I bask in affection that can never be pretended I enjoy you amidst these displays of interaction And inspite of the crowd's doting steps and busy talks, I can still hear the forebearance of that pent-up sigh And that jump in your throat when you are amused I hope you are amused at me. I hope I am that laughter But I fear for you when you are not with me How much arrogance the world is feeding you I am afraid of the rashness of your inexperienced mind, Scared of imparting wisdom too late I fear for me when I am not with you How easy it is to lose you these days An ephemeral sunset just long enough for a quick glimpse And with an embrace, a smile and some tears, we part You, the virgin mind incarnate And I, at last, your father

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3 comments

[0] god'swife 14-Jun-04/7:49 PM Reply
This poem suffers from verbal dysenteria. Take two aspirins and shoot me in the morning.
[10] versus_u 24-Jun-04/12:14 AM Reply
this piece seemed to me that all the bitterness has escaped you, my friend. be grateful for a love that has blossomed. i'm happy for you..
[n/a] Lifeboatman › versus_u 16-Sep-04/9:49 PM Reply
thanks.. someone noticed..