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Free verse № 106977

Lady Bradbury’s Excursion

by Dovina

Member since 2004 · Posted 1 Jul 2004 · 14 comments

(or Whiffs from a Dark Journey) Alone again on grassy path To vital refuge on rainy night Latched inside a tiny shack Bushy skirt pressed left and right Petticoats, underdress, overdress raised Bloomers first lowered Now drawers, is that all? The word I want is “empowered” Nothing to see but lacy cloth All fluffed around from waist to head Lower parts lower ever so slowly Wood donut on hindquarters dread Perched silently upon the black pit Gentle tinkles like soft mountain brook Breeze of flowers, a scent to imagine Jealous, but quiet, contained in this nook.

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14 comments

[9] Quarton 1-Jul-04/2:19 PM Reply
Very clever and humorous. Original for sure. A nine
in my opinion.
[n/a] Dovina › Quarton 1-Jul-04/2:36 PM Reply
If I change "Dark Journey" to "Angelically Dark Journey," would you make it a ten?
[9] Quarton › Dovina 1-Jul-04/2:53 PM Reply
Actually, "Whiffs" is perfect. Excursion, indeed:)
[9] Shuushin 1-Jul-04/6:58 PM Reply
Dovina - this is somewhat strange.

it really is.
[n/a] Dovina › Shuushin 1-Jul-04/7:29 PM Reply
Stranger than Antagon?
[n/a] Dovina › Dovina 2-Jul-04/10:53 AM Reply
Stranger than -=Zamzara=-?
[10] Dan garcia-Black 1-Jul-04/7:47 PM Reply
I'm lucky. With my ruffles over my head, I stand to tinkle and make the wood donut even more dreadful on future other's hindquarters.
[n/a] Dovina › Dan garcia-Black 1-Jul-04/7:48 PM Reply
Oh, thank you so much.
[10] Stephen Robins 2-Jul-04/3:33 AM Reply
Absolutely splendid.
[9] Quarton 2-Jul-04/10:05 AM Reply
You have taken the mundane and transformed it
into art. About as original as any poem I have
read in a long time. It takes a "leak" where it
has never gone before and somehow does so in good
taste. Womderful!
[10] eliastemplar 6-Oct-04/10:01 AM Reply
I never would have thought to write a poem about taking a leak, but you've started my gears turning. I found this poem very amusing.
[n/a] Dovina › eliastemplar 6-Oct-04/10:09 AM Reply
Not too amusing, please.
[8] dancin_n_da_moonlite 16-Jan-05/9:29 PM Reply
interesting.................
[2] Edna Sweetlove 17-Oct-06/6:55 AM Reply
Doughnut, dear. "Donut" is the brand name.