poemranker ::Breakfast in Bed by brazen

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Free verse № 11199

Breakfast in Bed

Member since 2002 · Posted 24 Aug 2002 · 3 comments

Morning airs clear the table, Your smile breakfast for my eyes, Almost everything was over easy, But recently our shit is scrambled, And I find you hard to swallow. As days go on, And weeks pass by, Its been easier to say goodbye, Grown strong alone, With peace of mind, My hunger filled from time to time, By the secret stash you left behind, Where now the only thing I fear, Is waking the fire on the range, And sitting for a real meal.

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[8] <{Baba^Yaga}> 25-Aug-02/8:38 AM Reply
hey, this is great! it reminds me of..my empty stomach rollllinggg.ahh food help, i writed to longed this passing nite. my colon is fecund in anticipation...8/10
[10] deleted user 29-Aug-02/7:28 PM Reply
good
[9] Christof 10-Sep-02/7:32 AM Reply
Your food metaphor works really well. the first stanza is impressively tight - think if you left it at that you'd have a good poem as well.