Shattered

by Aetius

Member since 2004 · Posted 13 Oct 2004 · 3 comments

Sharp-edged glass fragments: There are things one should not touch ... Like broken friendships.

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[10] Rollsoftoiletpaper 13-Oct-04/7:18 PM Reply

Wooooah. Dig it, man. Dig it. This is the first Haiku I've ever read in my life...that I actually liked. 10 for me.

[9] eliastemplar 14-Oct-04/2:43 AM Reply

Excellent, but I don't think punctuation improves on haikus. Meaningful and thought provoking, friends are such rare and fragile things.

[9] Dovina 14-Oct-04/5:05 PM Reply

I agree that the punctuation is not needed.

Haikus are supposed to be 5-7-5, thus the "There are" in line 2. But those words are so trite here that I'd omit them. Otherwise good.