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Free verse № 113967

the victory

Member since 2004 · Posted 19 Oct 2004 · 3 comments

this knotted tree once flowered and green now cut down and cut up then whitled into boards lashed together and raised up high a pillar of anguish a monument of pain but this instrument of death has brought me life and its crimson stains wash white as snow though mourners wail and don black veils i weep with joy for my Christ has conquered the grave a tree delivered me over to hades now a tree has released me from my bondage

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[8] Dovina 19-Oct-04/5:19 PM Reply
I wonder why you break rhythm in the last three lines.

I weep with joy
for Christ has conquered

As a tree delivered
Him to hades
now a tree releases
me from bondage

Just a thought.
[8] tadpole 23-Mar-05/7:00 PM Reply
love the topic but I've seen your other poems and I bet you could make it flow a lot better
[n/a] oneglove › tadpole 10-May-05/3:49 PM Reply
agreed