poemranker ::Lufituaeb by Phaiyne

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Ode № 113996

Lufituaeb

Member since 2004 · Posted 20 Oct 2004 · 5 comments

Like the coffee-brown in my eye My skin is hued of shy And the sun braided in my hair Reflects the beauty inside The length of my legs Could not run the distance of my rareness Nor could my slim figure Compete with my spirit’s fairness The arch of my back Will never support my love For it is heavier than this heart of gold And thicker than kin-love blood The tilt of my breasts Can be smaller than self-hate But the balance of my shoulders Comes from self-love’s weight My features will never amount To what God put in my heart Because I know with no ego at all That I am work of living art You can tint my eye blank Or shade my skin bland But this soul will forever lush In God’s working hands

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5 comments

[n/a] Phaiyne 20-Oct-04/6:43 PM Reply
Love yourself
[n/a] zodiac › Phaiyne 21-Oct-04/12:59 AM Reply
We know. That's not what's wrong with this poem.
[7] Dovina 21-Oct-04/1:30 PM Reply
Arogant
[n/a] Phaiyne › Dovina 21-Oct-04/7:49 PM Reply
didnt mean for it to be arrogant or conceited, im just trying to point out that inner beauty is stronger than outer beauty.
[7] Dovina › Phaiyne 22-Oct-04/11:20 AM Reply
Yes, I thought so,and I agree, but it sounds arrogant.