poemranker ::Caducus (destined to fall) by Caducus

DetailsThe poem, its numbers, and the conversation.

Free verse № 115122

Caducus (destined to fall)

Member since 2002 · Posted 8 Nov 2004 · 2 comments

Destined to fall he fell. From birth to Earth to heavenly mirth, And with her he would dwell. He was named. But felt no identity. He was tamed by her entity. They would walk through fields of corn. Repair one another when torn. Lay in bluebells and dream. Weep with willows by the stream. He named for her a star one day, and like him it fell. Close to her yet so faraway, But she could never tell. Destined to fall, he could never rise, and she saw such sadness in his eyes. I have loved you before she said, In another life when you were dead. Your wings were beating in my heart and when it was broken you were free, my life was ended but my heart was mended for I knew in the next life, you’d be with me. He asked her why she died. To which she smiled and replied, ‘because I never lived my love’ I have waited for you forever and heaven no longer exists above, Its in us both together.

Rate it

0 is the worst, 10 the best. Pick a number, add a comment if you like, then send it. Keys: 0–9 pick, Enter sends.

mean 6.29 weighted 5.35 rank 3419 views 307 View voting details →

7 votes so far. Yours would make 8.7 votes so far

2 comments

[9] Dovina 8-Nov-04/10:12 AM Reply
The first verse is great, except for heavenly mirth. It's all pretty good.
[8] 7!3 19-Nov-04/7:35 PM Reply
liked it