poemranker ::Distance by Lifeboatman

DetailsThe poem, its numbers, and the conversation.

Free verse № 117411

Distance

Member since 2003 · Posted 28 Dec 2004 · 8 comments

I dream of you throughout this lunar arc Where yon treetops bask in moving manna Of stardust and wind-swept imagination And of music, this still night, had left intrepid This night, which soothes nature's harsh stimuli Shall also let Sleep, your memories, mimic Even if you deign give them to someone else For we cannot but prove to your nostalgia alumni And to your prophecy non-existent else minimal I at least had admitted a long time ago To be of this function in this life you live Even if you prove to be an angel most heavenly For Music made Heaven yearn a place to go to And both of us saw perfection in you

Rate it

0 is the worst, 10 the best. Pick a number, add a comment if you like, then send it. Keys: 0–9 pick, Enter sends.

mean 5.00 weighted 5.00 rank 7978 views 284 View voting details →

3 votes so far. Yours would make 4.3 votes so far

8 comments

[6] Dovina 28-Dec-04/2:37 PM Reply
Too vague
[n/a] Lifeboatman › Dovina 29-Dec-04/4:34 AM Reply
really?? I haven't noticed...
[6] Dovina › Lifeboatman 29-Dec-04/10:38 AM Reply
Yes, Verse 2 especially escapes me.
[n/a] Lifeboatman › Dovina 29-Dec-04/6:51 PM Reply
Oh it just means that I am but a part of her past and may just play a minimal role or maybe nothing in her future...
[6] Dovina › Lifeboatman 29-Dec-04/7:30 PM Reply
It's vague because of "nostalgia alumni" which maybe should be "nostalgic alumni." And because of "prophecy non-existent else minimal" which maybe should be "unfulfilled prophesy."
[n/a] Lifeboatman › Dovina 29-Dec-04/8:06 PM Reply
nah.. I just forgot commas...
[9] Bhaskaryya 29-Dec-04/7:00 PM Reply
Awesome!!!
[n/a] Lifeboatman › Bhaskaryya 29-Dec-04/7:09 PM Reply
thanks...