A Dear John

Member since 2005 · Posted 15 Jan 2005 · 2 comments

I cried my last tears today. I left my old life today. I've made a change. You're not going to use me and you're done feeding me the lies I was your mat,a place to wipe your feet. I was your on call punching bag. No more will I take it from you. I'll give you no more credit,I'll give you no more love. You've said your last cruel word to me. I've cried my last tears for you. I've left my old life and I've left you.

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[6] deleted user 16-Jan-05/2:08 AM Reply

Yeah dude, I like it. It's really basic, but also universal. We've all been there. I just wish you would've added more details, but maybe that ain't your style. Anyway, good.

[5] Dovina 16-Jan-05/6:48 AM Reply

I don't like this one nearly as well as your other. This seems written out of anger without close attention to craft. It's a whiny poem. And double-spacing doesn't help, nor do the lack of a spaces after commas.