poemranker ::thoughts on a long lazy day by francis nor capule

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Free verse № 118863

thoughts on a long lazy day

Member since 2004 · Posted 23 Jan 2005 · Edited 30 Jan 2005 · 6 comments

i fondly recall those conversations we had every morning , the distance notwithstanding, and how i wished you there at my side then and there... the way i'd wait for you to tell me that you'd be leaving soon, so i could just get a glimpse of you, as you walk away. how i would think of what you think , and what you want, and what you will. those would still be the best days that i ever had. and it brings to my heart a soft warmth... just remembering.

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6 comments

[6] SupremeDreamer 26-Jan-05/6:18 AM Reply
evanesced auspice. There goes a suggestion from my asshat sir.
[10] Lifeboatman 27-Jan-05/4:29 AM Reply
Damn.. these things are vague.. but gives you that warm toasted feeling like marshmallows left in the sun.. 10
[9] Shuushin 27-Jan-05/8:13 PM Reply
purity often wins.
[8] wilco 28-Jan-05/6:22 PM Reply
the leaving lines are too close together, I think. Maybe you were going for a repetition thing there, but I think it would work better if you changed one of the leavings to something else.
[n/a] francis nor capule › wilco 30-Jan-05/4:49 AM Reply
hey... that's great . let me see what i can do about the opine.
[8] wilco 31-Jan-05/3:30 PM Reply
better.