Slowing - or, A Love Poem with Eggs and Short Lines

Member since 2004 · Posted 9 Feb 2005 · Edited 31 May 2005 · 5 comments

My love, she has astonishing ways of slowing, when the eggs are done and I'm bug-spas- ming in my skin - and who ever was who liked cold eggs? My love, she tips the change-dish off the curio, when she'd rather stay in she frets, she doffs her dress again or finds my lips not fast enough. She says, don't think me a fool for this; I know exactly what time it is.

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[7] Dovina 31-May-05/9:16 AM Reply

I'm taking it as a late-period activity where Verse 2 either conflicts with the ending or there is a change of heart. I go with the latter.

[9] INTRANSIT › Dovina 1-Jun-05/7:11 AM Reply

What if it's actually pre-pre period? The eggs are cold. They've been in the lining and are about to be discarded. God. there's so much shit I could say about this and none of it would be right. Fuck. I like it. And Rockmage is a boob. There.

[n/a] zodiac › Dovina 1-Jun-05/10:07 PM Reply

Well, the ending is her talking, the rest is the guy. Does that help? Or - I meant the part beginning with the second "My love" to be a different day.

For my part, yes, there was a change of heart. Right around the dress-doffing and kissing part.

[7] deleted user 1-Jun-05/5:24 AM Reply

Closing lines:

'Don't think me a fool for this
she says
I know exactly what time it is.'

Unless you consider the two-line consistency a holy must?

'or find my lips
not fast enough. She says

don't think me a fool for this
I know exactly what time it is.'

[10] al-naafiysh 2-Jun-05/6:00 AM Reply

Zo I love this poem.
I love the change of heart, I knew there was another
side of you that was senitive