poemranker ::We Have Nothing to Talk About by jessicazee

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Free verse № 120986

We Have Nothing to Talk About

Member since 2002 · Posted 3 Mar 2005 · 3 comments

But my mouth keeps on opening Telling trade secrets, breaching slumber party Trance confessions, light as a feather, Stiff as a board, your fingers In circles on my temples. That was whiskies ago, In this city where beer is so sacred We converge, have toasts. A few topics attempt value… Bangs, noses, the price of pitchers… Three games of pinball and I’ll leave you a line in the bathroom Under the matchbook As long as you don’t kiss him While I’m gone.

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[10] Stephen Robins 3-Mar-05/6:35 AM Reply
Gritty.
[9] Dovina 3-Mar-05/6:57 AM Reply
Good. I think you could make it stronger by cutting a few words -
"trance" - 3 adjectives in a row. And a line break after "secrets."
"so" in line 7
[7] edpeterson 4-Mar-05/4:18 PM Reply
stiff as a board.