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Disfigure (Free verse) by DevilBuni What have you done?
How can words disfigure me so?
No longer the person I was;
I've transformed into you.
Each word you spoke cut away
A little piece of me;
Chiseled into your likeness.
It's no longer my face in the mirror.
Now, I too disfigure others,
Hoping in one I will find myself;
Someone who resembles my past.
But in each, all I see is you.
Up the ladder:
An Angel
Down the ladder:
Observer
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Posted: March 7, 2005 2:26 PM PST; Last modified: March 7, 2005 2:26 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.62753 Overall Rank: 2204 Comments:
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Dovina @ 12.72.6.27
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7-Mar-05/3:44 PM
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It's far fetched, but with enough truth to consider developing.
I rate you 10.
Good sentiment, but it needs fleshed out. Nice name by the way. -7-
<3 Jason
What do you mean by fleshed out? Like add more?
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