poemranker ::Boulder Lake, Somewhere in Wisconsin by jessicazee

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Boulder Lake, Somewhere in Wisconsin

Member since 2002 · Posted 11 Apr 2005 · 1 comment

You said we’d go to the little lake on the res. You’d know the right site, the two trees, the private beach, the wasp nest, where you saw the owl, a skunk ignored you, the beer you already got, that many mushrooms is all you said we’d need. Drive your red truck to Elkhorn past Hales Corners where you shopped for backpacks, sleeping bags, rain hats at Sherper’s, Army surplus and camouflage. I still think I’d take care of the fire while you made the tent livable; cut green wood for hot dogs, gathered kindling and fallen logs. I would burn the first flame even though yours would burn faster, hotter, more inside the pit we dug together.

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[8] Dovina 12-Apr-05/7:35 AM Reply
Good, but a problem with tenses - "You said we’d go" in first sentence, then "Drive your red truck" in the second. Then back to "I'd" in the third.