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The Instructor

Member since 2005 · Posted 2 May 2005 · 7 comments

Secretly, instructor lets down his rigging to examine a drying canvas. She was still inside the fence, he thought, circling the edges for a way out. And she was close to jumping it, he saw by the assailants of color that licked the surface. A dosh of red aligned with streaking brown edges left raw, a slice through anyone who looked; he knew what she was doing. He traced it down to where it ended, a tranquil rift of blue where the painting seemed to sigh, and it was clearly the most difficult sentence. Sliding his focus further between layers, he picked at her process and the whole work came untied all around him. He balked at the naïveté of it; blushing at her bare use of gesture, remembering what it was like when he, too, would fervently daub at answers ragging the galloping drips, deep into nights in love, with an over-zealous use of Crimson. He had felt that way about everything, would finger even the red velvet of his dreams.

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[10] sliver 2-May-05/9:30 PM Reply
Well, hello. Nice to meet you. I just finished losing myself into a very blue canvas,really. I have only two words for you. Damn... Wow.
[n/a] Prince of Void › sliver 10-May-05/9:03 PM Reply
yeah it's really good to read ur poem ..
the nice impact of senses into the spirit of colors
it made the crimson ocean into the crimson iris of an artist
this is a poem seized colors in the frames of words
[10] sliver 2-May-05/9:31 PM Reply
BTW, Did he convert her?
[n/a] Ranger 3-May-05/2:29 PM Reply
dosh?
[10] INTRANSIT › Ranger 3-May-05/2:29 PM Reply
I was thinking that too, but I like it better than -dash. It feels like a wider stroke.
[n/a] Alizarin_Crimson › INTRANSIT 3-May-05/2:29 PM Reply
I thought of a "Dosh" as being thicker than a dash...its creamier, kind of like something between a slosh and a dash. I dunno. Painters will understand :)
[10] Scarlett 24-Mar-06/3:01 PM Reply
Mmmm hmmm... dosh it is... I love to paint and the picture comes to life with the brushstrokes of your words. Paint on.