I'm Sorry

Member since 2002 · Posted 1 Sep 2002 · 3 comments

I'm sorry I corrupted you With my imperfect existence. I'm sorry I complicated your life With my never-ending resistance. I'm sorry that I compared you To those from my past. I'm sorry I forgot to compare That those didn't last. I'm sorry I wasn't worth The tears you cried for me. I'm sorry for the pain I caused When I said it wasn't meant to be. I'm sorry I said good-bye, And turned your love away. I'm sorry it's taken me this long To realize I wanted you to stay.

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[6] [mojo] 8-Sep-02/9:28 AM Reply

A little work required on stanza two, lines three and four. Not too sure that "compare" was the right choice of word, doesn't seem to make literal sense. Other wise promising.6.

[8] Tarquin De La Bog 8-Sep-02/5:03 PM Reply

With a little extra work you could have left me feelng utterly empty inside. 8. Short, concise and filled with startling strong sentences. The best poem I've read for a while. I commend you Sir.

[n/a] PawnedTidal › Tarquin De La Bog 9-Sep-02/8:31 PM Reply

Thanks, Tarquin. This poem was one that came easier and more quickly than most I've written. Guess there's no motivation like the one that got away, huh?