If you're done, I'd like my Battle Axe please

Member since 2004 · Posted 29 Jul 2005 · 1 comment

Dear "My Only Ever True Love in the World and Endearing Soul Mate", If you're quite done Cleaving my dignity in two and dismembering my pride, I would most appreciate it If you considered returning my Battle Axe to me. I have a castle to defend. Love, "Your One and Only Heartbroken Admirer" P.S. Would it hurt you to sharpen it a bit before you get it back to me?

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[7] LilMsLadyPoet 31-Jul-05/7:13 AM Reply

I love this...I think I would change "I would most appreciate it
If you considered returning" to 'if you'd consider returning'.
and "before you get it back to me" perhaps would change 'get' to 'give', or 'return it to me?'