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First

by Dovina

Member since 2004 · Posted 9 Aug 2005 · 16 comments

Adam may be the first man, but Jerry was the first boy. Adam gave a rib for Eve. Jerry gave some daffodils.

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16 comments

[n/a] Caducus 9-Aug-05/8:03 AM Reply
A guess - Mr Springer

Final thought - confuzled.
[n/a] Dovina › Caducus 9-Aug-05/11:34 AM Reply
?
[5] daggatolar 9-Aug-05/8:09 AM Reply
and Jerry, after Adam
fell into the pit
like blind
[n/a] Dovina › daggatolar 9-Aug-05/11:35 AM Reply
I don't think either of them fell into any pit blind.
[6] T. Jonathron Remp 9-Aug-05/8:10 AM Reply
So we're all Jerry's kids?
[n/a] Dovina › T. Jonathron Remp 9-Aug-05/11:35 AM Reply
No, only a certain girl was Jerry's kid.
[n/a] ALChemy 9-Aug-05/8:23 AM Reply
Then Juan came along and Adam and Jerry never heard from Eve again.
In all seriousness though. Don't you think Genesis is a bit demeaning to women. Someone should rewrite it. It's not like it hasn't been done before.
[n/a] Dovina › ALChemy 9-Aug-05/11:34 AM Reply
Neither Geneses nor Jerry is demeaning to women in my opinion.
[8] Bethy 9-Aug-05/12:34 PM Reply
Was Jerry your first boyfriend...if so...nice...am I on the right track...first thing it made me think of...my first ...crush guy, gave me a Gordie Howe hockey card... :) Bethy
[n/a] Dovina › Bethy 9-Aug-05/12:44 PM Reply
Yep, you're onto me. Don't know where all these other comments come from.
[n/a] Stephen Robins 9-Aug-05/2:38 PM Reply
Proper.
[0] zodiac 14-Aug-05/1:04 AM Reply
Verily. -0-
[n/a] Dovina › zodiac 15-Aug-05/2:10 PM Reply
Never before have you zeroed me. Why?
[0] zodiac › Dovina 20-Aug-05/4:45 AM Reply
I really really really didn't like it. As poetry or anything else. No hard feelings, I hope.
[0] zodiac › Dovina 20-Aug-05/4:49 AM Reply
I spent an hour last week trying to write a reply explaining why I didn't like it. Then I thought, well shit it's not like she spent an hour writing the poem in the first place. I also spent a long night reading Genesis last week and have decided Genesis is demeaning to women and you are demeaning to women. This shouldn't come as a surprise to you. The only way to make Genesis not-demeaning (which, I should add, I do as a matter of course) is by being flexible enough to squeeze through your own asshole. On top of that, I have very little idea what you mean by this poem.
[n/a] ALChemy › zodiac 20-Aug-05/9:54 AM Reply
And Jesus said "It is easier for zodiac to squeeze through his own asshole than for a woman to get a membership into the great golf courses of heaven."